Kapa Haka Night

Last night, the school went to the hall to do our performance in front of our families and parents. 
I watched my sister perform their class item and, in their last song, my sister was the leader for it. 
Next, it was Room 4’s turn. The first song was called Haere Mai and the second was E Aue. When I was on stage, I felt as nervous as a bug getting squished, but I still got through it without getting stage fright. 
Finally, at the end, Mr Keogh said a speech for all of us and it was fun.
If you want to see the performances, click on this link.
Well done, River. You are showing enthusiasm at recording your experiences. 
You have written a great simile in your recount - as nervous as a bug getting squished - that is very creative. I bet you enjoyed thinking that one up.
Your writing shows how proud you are of your sister and the way she led the Room 5 group.
Next Steps:
Add some more details to each paragraph - 
- In paragraph 2, add information like what they sang and how they sang. 
- In paragraph 3, tell the readers how you and your classmates performed. Help your readers to see you and your classmates on the stage performing - describe for them how you were in lines and what you were wearing, and what you did with your feet and hands, and what it looked like when you were performing E Papa Waiari. 
- Add paragraph 4, when you tell your readers about the Kapa Haka group performance.